It was a nice, bright and sunny day. A small stadium was filled with athletes and their families. The upcoming 200-meter race was announced. My heart was thumping as I was one of the participants in that race. I was a bit nervous and had a lot of resentment toward my coach. There was an internal conflict that was running through my mind. The whole year of training for this race was running like a movie in my head. I was one of the girls who had won a gold medal for the school in the previous year. There were five girls in my team who got trained by the coach. The coach favoured a girl from our team throughout the year and he stated that the girl would lift a trophy under his training. Maybe the coach saw some potential in that girl. This favouritism made me feel discouraged the whole time. I was discouraged about being demotivated by the coach. The race was about to begin and I was still in a dilemma about what to do. My desire to teach a lesson to the coach took precedence over winning the race. Suddenly, I gave a resentful glare to my coach and decided not to win it. Even though I had finished the race, there was something I did not feel good about.

I was completely shattered for not winning the race. My thought was so tangled that I felt like there was no hope left for me. I felt like I hit the rock bottom and there was no way out. My parents hoped I would win the race. I was also terrified about how would my parents react when they found out the real reason why I did not win the race. My Parents noticed that I had remained silent for some days. My father gave me some time to vent out all feelings. After about a week, I had a heart to heart conversation with my parents. To my surprise, I did not get scolded for the decision I had taken and it was such a sigh of relief 🙂 . On the next day, they went to the principal’s office and had a discussion regarding the coach. After some days, there was a new coach appointed for the training.

After this failure, I started to doubt all of my decisions and became a low self-esteemed girl. From this point onwards, my parents tried to uplift me enormously. I got rock-solid support from them.  My father even came to some of the training sessions to support me. It was my parents’ unconditional support and encouragement which made me work hard throughout the training. Finally, the day came when I was ready to run the race at the same stadium. Even though I won the silver medal, I didn’t feel lesser than an Olympic winner  🙂 . 

My father and mother are pillars of my strength. I am blessed to have my parents as mentors. They know me from inside and always willing to help in every possible way. They always encourage me to face the hurdles and become a better and improved version of myself 🙂 . Whenever I am skeptical about some situations in life, they always give the pros and cons. And it helps me to take the right decision. In the end, this failure came to me as a blessing in disguise. It gave me true mentors for life. I really wish I can be a positive influence on my kids and become a good mentor like my parents.

This post is an emotional rollercoaster for me. Hopefully, you lovely ladies enjoy reading it. 🙂

Responses

  1. Anastasiya

    Priya, after reading your post I have a feeling that I have just completed a book. Your style of writing is so capturing and intriguing! Your article is full of useful vocabulary… which I have to work with. I enjoy your post a lot!! But… the most important thing of your article is the meaning which is extremely deep for me!! In my opinion, a Mentor/Teacher should be very careful to highlight the favorites… and I also know about it from my own experience teaching my “students” about laboratory skills at work. I also follow the same way with my colleagues at work as a head of the lab. Priya, your story is an amazing example how the situation like with your sport coach can work for others in the team…discouraging them. I am so so happy for your sport results!! My sincerely congratulations and best wishes to keep moving forward!! And many many thanks for your awesome blog post!!

    1. Priya Post author

      Thank you so much Anastasiya:) . I’m glad that you liked the post. I can say that you are certainly a good teacher to your students and they are lucky to have you. it was a silly mistake of a 6th garder girl who took a wrong decision, but still, I’m happy I made that mistake. Otherwise, It would take a long time to realize true mentors of my life 🙂  

      1. Anastasiya

        Priya, I agree with you. But I even cannot imagine what could feel this little a 6th girl. Yes, everything what happens is for better and it was an important turn in your life! And… oh, Priya… thank you for your kind words. 

  2. Erika

    @Priya, this is such a touching story and you wrote it in an incredibly captivating style. The choice of your vocabulary and the way you expressed yourself made it very clear how you felt at the time and how important this story was in your life.

    A few tips on the writing:

    There was an announcement made for a 200-meter race. >> When did this announcement happen? I think it was announced at the stadium right before it happened, right? If so, I’d paraphrase it a bit to show that it was an expected race soon to happen. > “The (upcoming) 200-meter race was announced.”

    There was an internal conflict was running in my mind. >> There was an internal conflict THAT was running through my mind.

    I was one of the girls who won a gold medal for the school in the previous year. >> Verb tenses: you have 2 tenses in the past. Which action happened first (being the girl at the race that day or winning a gold medal the previous year)? – What do we use to tell a story with 2 actions in the past?

    for the school in the previous year. There were five girls in my team. >> It feels like these 2 sentences need a connector, something that links them.

    …he declared to our team that the girl would lift a trophy under his training. >> I think I’d use ‘he stated that this girl would…’ or ‘he determined that this girl would…’

    This favouritism made me discouraged the whole time. >>This favouritism made me feel discouraged…

    My parents hoped me to win the race.>> My parents hoped I would win the race. (we use ‘hope’ in a past tense, because we no longer hope for the event or thing; we know it didn’t happen. We use it to tell someone about how we felt in the past.)

    I was also terrified about the fact when my parents would know the real reason for not winning the race.>> I was also terrified about how my parents would react when they found out the real reason why I didn’t win the race.

    After this failure, I was started to doubt all of my… >> Here you are using Passive Voice which is generally used when we don’t know or don’t want to mention the doer of the action. However, we know here> You started to doubt all of your decisions.

    Excellent work!! Well done! 🙂

    1. Priya Post author

      Thank you very much, Erika, for your feedback on my writing. Hopefully, I will not make these mistakes in the future 🙂  . Even though I have edited my post with your feedback, I have a question regarding one of the correction.

      for the school in the previous year. There were five girls in my team. >> It feels like these 2 sentences need a connector, something that links them.

      There were five girls in my team and I was one of the girls who had won the gold medal for the school previous year. 

      Is this correct? but, it does not look good to me.  I think I’m not able to find the right connector or maybe I need to rephrase it. Thanks.

      1. Erika

        Hi @Priya!! You did an amazing job, and it is wonderful to see that you’ve taken my notes into consideration.

        Now that I read that paragraph again, I think it’s fine. I think that by changing the tenses the narrative got a connection. You’ve got a great way of writing!

        Excellent work!